Some implications mentioned do not relate to actual findings of the report. Relates findings to the purpose of the study vaguely or only relates some of the major findings to the purpose of the study.
Order of Information- Main implication of transient stratification mentioned before findings. Order of information is in some places illogical.
Language- Be more precise and accurate with your language. What processes are you referring to in the last sentence of the first paragraph? Various terms used included “structural cells of matter” and “depth of the ocean” and have nothing to do with experiment conducted. Frequently uses ambiguous or overly general language, unnecessary words, or inappropriate precision.
