Take into consideration that this is an editing request to upgrade a-not-so-well written assignment.
However, there are few points that I would like to discuss that requires amending:
– The assignment is written with a mixture of gender-neutral, and non-gender-neutral language. Could you please use gender-neutral language and remove the grammar that favours any gender such as:, “we,” “he”, “her…”
– The ‘Research Design,’ and ‘Participants of the Study’ are both discussing mobile phones, The research design has to be about H & M
– Specify the which survey tool was employed, an example ‘survey monkey.’
– Can you include the two focus groups sessions you had and the ‘discussion of any problems encountered while conducting the research?’
– In the appendix, can you please include, the ‘informed consent from participants?’
– Can you improve the relationship between the survey questionnaire and the results?
– Finally, Can you please give this assignment a general spruce to turn it into a well-written report.
