This essay is aiming to show one of the applicant’s most significant challenge, and how he conquered it step by step.
Original detailed description is provided below:
5) Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?
Things to consider: A challenge could be personal, or something you have faced in your community or school. Why was the challenge significant to you? This is a good opportunity to talk about any obstacles you’ve faced and what you’ve learned from the experience. Did you have support from someone else or did you handle it alone?
If you’re currently working your way through a challenge, what are you doing now, and does that affect different aspects of your life? For example, ask yourself, “How has my life changed at home, at my school, with my friends, or with my family?”
Here is the story I want you to write about:
The applicant founded a club in high school for he wanted to spread the knowledge of preventing careless fires in the community. The challenge here is that because of the doubt from peers and the many complicated issues he had to solve (gathering fund, finding coworkers, designing events, etc. you can make up more troubles he had to face at that time, make sure they are appropriate and shows it was very difficult to found a club). All these difficulties made him to doubt himself and got nervous about this thing, so the real challenge here is to push himself and be confident. So one day when he is really tired of all the issues in the club and start to think of quitting the whole thing, he put away all the paperwork and start to ask himself why he wanted to found this club, and after reminding himself his goal and calm down, realized that the real “enemy” he is facing here is his inner doubt of himself and his lack of confidence. So he fixed everything and eventually the club went well and held many meaningful events that serves for his purpose.
I would like you to write about his thoughts and all the difficulties he faced, but the focus should be on how he figured out everything, like he calm down and thought about everything, and how he fixed it (you can use your imagination for this part, like what he did to fixed this problem other than just being calm, maybe ignoring hostile peers and become determined etc. ).
Also, please show that he learned a lot more than just how to found a club, like he gained strong will and patience, as well as ignoring the negative/hostile comments made by people that are just jealous etc.
Write the essay in first person’s perspective.
Word limit: ~300.
Add logical linkages in between the paragraphs/sections to ensure the whole essay’s logical flow.
You may start from the end of the story and not to write this essay in chronological order, like starting from an successful event the club held and talk about how difficult it was at first to found it and how much he struggled about this. This is up to your preference, all I want is the essay has a good flow and fits the description perfectly.
Enclosed is the applicant’s personal statement and his essay on the topic of diverse background, may be helpful to you to learn more about him.